Sunday, October 7, 2012

Random game turned story


Participle
Absolute
Appositives
Adjectives

In the realm of Nicolten, a land of fierce raging conflict, a battle that took place among the Sinnista Mountains shook the continent and forever changed the lands. This particular realm was made completely of mountains. Neither a single plain nor forest existed amount the rugged landscape.

A steel construct named Chrono, stoic and relentless, was aimlessly roaming the mountainside.
Nearby a group of unsuspecting goblins, Arsht and Flak, were fighting amongst themselves over a scrap of meat. Little did these two groups know they were drawing upon each other.
Arsht, anxiously awaiting, poached one of the king’s game to fill his belly while Flak took a nap.
In an unfortunate turn of events, Chrono stumbled upon the two goblins crushing them with a fiery wrath, consuming them completely, leaving nothing but ashes.

Returning late: Gavel, Mitch, and Snipe, Arsht and Flak’s comrades, entered the fray, but instead of avenging their fallen comrades Gavel and Mitch pledged their loyalty to Chrono in fear of their lives; a typical goblin tactic to stay alive. However, Snipe, a master of his craft, refused to side with Chrono and opposed him with great rebuke; alas, Chrono quickly dispatched Snipe with a searing spear of fire before he could plot any deviance. [There’s a lot going on here… is there anything amiss?]

The ensuing carnage, gruesome and brutal, did not go unheard. Clay, a heartless being, much like Chrono, happened to be flying over and came down to rest on his shoulder. [Can I use two consecutive appositives like this?]

Another flying beast, Miz-Nivvit who happened to be tracking Clay also circled the field above letting out an unruly shriek. Miz-Nivvit was a beast like no other, thrashed and grasped at the air, while continuing to circle.

Hearing his call for help, Hyperbola, Miz-Nivvit’s brother, swooped in to join the fray.
The two leered at Chrono and his unlikely companions, Maws gaping, ready to strike. Without hesitation the two descended in ravaging the group, leaving nothing but wreckage and corpses, before returning to the sky to search for their next prey.


I think I have everything labeled correctly aside from the crazy sentence in the middle. Feel free to comment on anything.

1 comment:

  1. pretty good, Nate--I think. You colored the whole sentence, rather than just the brush stroke, so I'm not sure which part you're referring to. Your absolute is off, but not much else. Yes, you have a whole string of appositives in one sentence if you want to.

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